I changed a lot of things from my first draft to my second draft. The biggest thing I changed was in Part II, and it was Wargrave's (my character) reaction to the whole cheating ordeal. At first, he only ratted out the people who bragged about getting high scores, but I realized that didn't reflect the person he was in the book. So I changed it to make sure Wargrave turned in not only himself, but everyone else who cheated, as well. So changing Part II meant I also had to change Part III's content regarding the comparison of how he and I both reacted to the cheating situation. So that affected the length; the draft started out as three full pages and ended up at five. Also, I went through to make sure I wasn't repetitive in terms of word choice, and I also changed the title and double checked my MLA format.
I think the peer review checklist helped me the most, because having a whole list of stuff you need to include can be overwhelming so I forgot to put some stuff. By having my peers make sure I wasn't missing anything important, it made me be more aware while I revised my rough draft. I'll be honest, I didn't ask my parents to read it, or my brother, just because I was pretty proud of it, and I had already gotten a lot of helpful feedback from my peers already. As for the written feedback on the times writing, I didn't receive much so I couldn't really apply it to my essay.
What will help me improve my writing this year is feedback from any teacher, or anonymous student revision because sometimes kids can be biased when they look at their friends' paper. So by having it anonymous, they won't be afraid to be honest about what they think of the ideas in an essay or story.
I know I have a lot of room to grow as a writer, since it's not my strongest suit as a student. I hope to grow more in creative writing because I have trouble in the creative department. One goal I'd like to achieve this year is to write a really good story that reaches into a reader's mind.
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